Tuesday, April 19, 2005

4th Floor Balcony Revelation


As the sun sets orange,
From a fourth floor balcony,
Leveling with my eyes
I realize
I much prefer to be entertained
By alcohol than your lies.

16 Comments:

Blogger Rat said...

WOW !!!!

10:59 AM  
Blogger Manish Bhatt said...

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11:06 AM  
Blogger Manish Bhatt said...

Hmmm. Whatever happened to Stevie Nicks singing, "tell me lies, tell me sweet little lies...".

11:07 AM  
Blogger Cocaine Jesus said...

The poem is in stark conflict with the picture and yet both convey powerful images.Powerful and evocative.
The poem I love as it has an element of vitriol and bile mixed from ?(hurt?)(pain?) not my fucking biz I guess and the picture is like any sunset or sunrise staggeringly beautiful.
What is that fantastic building in the picture?

4:13 PM  
Blogger JP said...

I REALLy like this one. This is exactly why I stupefy myself with excessive quantities of beer when I'm down. I'd rather be an alcholic than a patsy.

6:51 PM  
Blogger Ostrich said...

The picture is taken from my balcony by Gander

Reminds me of a scene from Constantine for some reason. That "fantastic" building is a cellphone Tower!!!

9:49 PM  
Blogger Cocaine Jesus said...

doh

1:52 PM  
Blogger Roger Stevens said...

Cellphone towers can be staggeringly beautiful of course.

I like the poem very much. I guess lies can be very entertaining - if you know they're lies.
If I were your editor I think I'd make the last line -
By alcohol than by your lies.

Great poem!

2:42 AM  
Blogger Anonymous Poet said...

That last line packs a punch. Ouch.

3:07 AM  
Blogger 100hands said...

this is just beautiful.

7:45 PM  
Blogger Finny Forever said...

nice. got to point out for no reason that you've got down a 'beatly tales' under favorite books. isnt it beastly?

3:20 PM  
Blogger Words Worth said...

pared down to the barest. powerful.

4:29 PM  
Blogger 100hands said...

sunny came home with a list of names, she didnt believe in transcendence.

6:32 PM  
Blogger Ostrich said...

Shawn Colvin?

12:31 AM  
Anonymous rajni said...

nice one...dying to use it on someone...just dont know who....yeah that me..rajni

11:55 AM  
Blogger finnegan said...

I really like this poem. Whittled down to a complex and densely emotional whack on the head.

3:20 PM  

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